Wish
>> Saturday, July 10, 2010
This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 12; the twelfth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.
Today, I had an Ice Cream,
In your favorite ice cream parlor,
Your favorite flavor,
They also played your favorite music
Taking me back to the days,
Which were favorite to both of us
I just wished that you were with me
I wish you had not left me
Alone in this ruthless world
I still remember
Your body cold
and your smile sweet
Just like the ice cream
I wish I hadn't killed you
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27 Expert Comments:
wow! the end just scared me!!
why do you even bother ?
Gosh.... 14 lines with the power of 400. This is a mindblowing post with an excellent ending.
Great job... Kp Up!!
OMG! He killed her! Why?
@Deeps!!
Don't get scared. Eat chocolates.
@GB
:)
@Sharma Ji
Thanks
@Dhiman Kaku
It was based on a story my friend had told me some time ago. She was looking so lovely that day. She could not have been more lovely and his. To capture the moment in his memories. He killed her.
Wow!! Scary!! :) ATB
-Swathi Pradeep,
http://swathipradeepworld.wordpress.com/2010/07/10/wish/"
just 14 lines but scary...
I wish you a good luck for BATOM - 12
Saravana Kumar - Wish
Yours Frendly,
Saravana Kumar M
hey Prathamesh...
First time, i am reading ur blog and i am quite impressed by ur writing...
gud things come in small packages.
This article for BAT is awesome...
Even i am contesting for BAT this time,
Have a look at my article here
this is out of blue, cool one, i like sudden endings :)
good one, the man was seemingly as ruthless as the world he complaine dof..
best wishes for BAT12..
btw the header pic, its amazing, it reminds me of the raavan from nina paley's sita sings the blues..
amazing movie, u must see it :)
Totally unexpected. Psychotic.
Good Wishes for BAT12!
Gkam - Wish
A delicious ice cream and a crime???
Unique...:-)
Now I would have fear eating ice cream with a guy...lols!!!
All the best!!!
Cruel ! And suave !
Loved it-reminded me of that poem, "Every man kills the things he loves-the brave man does it with a sword,the coward with a smile".
Brilliant !
Oops.. what a cruel ending.. and what a cruel post.. :P
U know as i started reading it, i started missing "SOMEONE" but the ending scared me :P
All da best for BATOM
http://frescobyme.blogspot.com/2010/07/wish.html
The warning in your blog is apt ;)
@Lost is Thoughts
Thanks. After 1 year of my blog, someone at last said it. I am elated to be called a B-Grade writer.
@Guddu
Smile :)
@Chanz
Wicked 3:)
@Brij
Brilliant
@Amity
Enjoy your ice cream
@gkam
It's wicked like your dp :P
@easyvivek
He is not at all ruthless
@Shreyas
Thank You
@Someone is Special
Special Thanks
@Swathi
Scary ATB? I will need to show you how crazy things can be.
what an idea sirjee ;-)
why to remember and bother about the person he killed....
wishful killing or psychotic wish..?
or
a betrayal ?
@Mahesh
It was not betrayal. It was a kind of selfish love.
As they say, nobody knows the future. She was his at her best. He wanted to capture the moment and he did that.
Wow !! Didn't see the end coming!!
All the best.
oh ma....its tempting post yaar..!!!
am gonna have an icecream in my fav place for sure today..!!!
Hathyaare :p
Nice poem and feelings dude :)
@ Ms. Meduri
:)
@Vipul
:P
Thank you.
OH!! Scary!! :O
And your explanation in the comment is all the more spine-chilling!!
All the best for BAT-12.
Cheers :)
:O mamu....excellent boss....shit...cold blood is indeed cold!!!
What a twist!
What a punch line.
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